Health Activist Writer’s Month Challenge Day 29 #HAWMC
Day 29 of the WEGO Health Activist Writer’s Month which I have signed up for – a month dedicated to the art of writing about health.
The penultimate day of our writing challenge and today’s prompt is:
Six Sentence Story Can you tell a story and make it short and sweet? What can you say in six sentences.
Apologies in advance..this is a sad story..but one I felt compelled to write.
Falling
It is late November – the days are dark and my mother, who is dying, has been moved to hospice care. The candles flicker in the room, silent but for her labored breathing. Aunts and uncles come and go, bending over her sleeping form, stroking her hair, murmuring prayers. My mother struggles for one last breath, then quietly leaves this world. I hold that precious hand that first held mine, lovingly stroke and kiss the fingers now growing white like an alabaster statue. I feel as if I am falling into a deep hole – the hole in my life where my mother should be and suddenly it occurs to me, I can’t remember the sound of her voice anymore.
Marie, these are quite possibly the six most poignant sentences I have ever read. I imagine tears falling as you wrote this – they did here as I read it.
I will be thinking about you today.
xx
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Have been crying a river all day Yvonne.
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Oh, Marie, these mere six sentences rip my heart in two! Yvonne’s right about the poignancy of your sentences. May you be touched and comforted by God’s blessings today. xxx
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Beautiful writing. Sympathies
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I’ve been there too. Beautiful, poignant story. I’m so sorry for your loss too. Would that none of us go through this. Ever. {{{}}}
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But alas we all have to Elaine..it’s just so hard that we can never be prepared for it when we do.
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Beautiful words. I’m sorry for your loss.
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Six very beautiful sentences. It’s such a hard loss at any age wishing you support with the journey ahead.
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Thank you Ann so much
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Marie, you truly and deeply took my breath away with this one. Makes me long for my mother even more right now….hugs and strength to you and all whose mother is no longer with us…
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Marie, you have completely taken my breath away with these words. Makes me long for my mom even more. Hugs and strength to you and to all of us that no long have our mothers here on this earth…
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Thank you for taking the time to leave such a warm and supportive comment – I appreciate it x
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That you can convey so much love and so much sadness in a mere six sentences just blows me away. Wow. Well done, my friend. Course, I’m sobbing at the same time I’m admiring you and your writing. You know I know exactly how you feel, right? xo
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Oh Nancy, I know you know x
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Profound. And beautiful.
{{{hugs}}}
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So poignant, beautiful and powerful. You recount a complete picture in such a few words and with such depth of emotion. I find it particularly powerful have been by your side virtually at this time. Thank you for sharing this xoxox
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(((((HUGS)))))))) and much love. Yes, ripped my heart out…. The pain is palpable. xoxox
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Good on you Marie, in a few short words you’ve summed up a feeling that’s so hard to express.
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Simply beautiful Marie – heartrendingly so.
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Thank you all so very much for your comments – they really help to soothe this aching heart of mine x
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I’m in the Lima airport getting ready to board my flight to Cuzco and finally have a few minutes online to spare. I’ve been wanting to catch up on your posts and just happened to read this one. It is so beautifully written and I can feel the moment through your words. Incredibly. I am sending you much love from the SW Hemisphere and I miss you very much. T xo
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Thank you hon x
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Marie,
I wasn’t expecting this…yet somehow it’s so perfectly fitting here. The poignancy of your words moves me more than I can express. So much love and emotion conveyed in six sentences. Thank you for writing and sharing this, Marie. And again, I’m so sorry for your loss.
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“Falling into a deep hole” – what a heartbreaking and powerful description. Such love and grief contained in six sentences. Please add mine to the flood of cyberhugs coming your way – I hope that you get lots of real ones when you need them too.
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